In the shadows I look to see;
Break the chains of mystery.
For in this darkness there be,
Demons that come for me.
My feet stumble on the ground,
And I dare not turn round.
For what horrors may be found,
In this darkness with no sound?
The walls seem to cave in;
Housing, trapping me within'
Oh! What ever could be my sin,
To be here cryin' and tremblin'?
The ground now is sodden;
Water rises ever so sudden.
Before I know what's happen'd,
I am wet from where I'd trodden.
Ahead, still there is no light;
Only shadows black as night.
Senses numb, nothing in sight;
My feet tread on, left and right.
Out of the darkness I hear,
A whisper, soft yet clear.
A girl, trembling with fear,
Calling from somewhere near.
I stop and listen again,
But the voice is gone by then.
I wonder what had happen'd;
Who was she, beyond my ken?
I struggle on even faster,
In hopes that I'd see her.
But the way gets dimmer,
And the walls get narrower.
Just then a voice so shrill;
With terror I start to fill!
At once my feet stand still,
Amidst the flowing rill.
It is the same girl I can tell;
From ahead came the yell.
What tragedy could befell,
A girl in this horrid hell?
"Save me! Please save me!"
Louder and louder is her plea.
A sudden chill overcomes me,
As I fight the urge to flee.
But again she calls for me,
"Help me please! Anybody!"
I shiver and try to pray calmly,
"Oh God... please help me"
With that I made my way
Thru the dark, narrow pathway,
Determined not to run away;
To save her, come what may.
But her cries become softer,
Before I can get to her.
And soon I am left to wonder,
What had happened to her.
Silence once again settles in;
No more screams or yellin'.
Just the sound of water trickelin',
Down from the walls surroundin'.
I fall to my knees in tears;
Drenched in my darkest fears.
I pray the girl she hears,
The sound of these falling tears.
Then I notice something new,
Just beyond my field of view.
Then the girl she screams anew,
"No! Look! It's behind you!"
7 comments:
My partner in Rhyme, great writing, complete with the dark theme and the scary ending too.. Thats what my earlier rhyme was missing.. an ending.. :D
I loved the flow of the words, it just seems so natural and effortless.. rhyme on dude..
Thanks. The first four or five verses just came to me like that... but it was an uphill battle from then on... like most of my long'ish' poems...
ka phu zawks alom le a tawpah hian.
Andy, an apology for not being one of those few people who can appreciate how beautiful ur rhymes are. I can't rhyme, that's wat I meant to say :) Nevertheless, I like how the story develops....contrasting from the usual love poems.
nice one there... didnt expect the ending to be like that though. Well, its certainly a contrast from ur usual poems... remember i have almost all of the poems u've written on my hard disk! Write about that night...u know..."Congratulations"...
@Zorami: Don't be like that! The stuff I post in this blog is all laid out in plain English, not with the 'doth's and the 'thou's that I write some with. It's like writing any other paragraph, but with a careful select words that also happen to rhyme... just another way of expressing oneself... try it!
"It's easy to rhyme,
It doesn't take much time!
Try it, it's really that easy,
You'll love it, you'll see!"
@Zosangzuala: Why thank you my comrade - in music, games, and of course the beautiful belles that maketh our world go round... I thank you in the most sincere and non-gay way for having kept safe my work, when I the author could not! Let's see, a rhyme about the night we serenaded that lass? Hmm...
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